What is the BEST way to combine sentences 2 and 3?
A The officers took the dog to the Nuneaton Warwickshire Wildlife Sanctuary, this is a shelter for homeless animals.
B The officers took the dog to the Nuneaton Warwickshire Wildlife Sanctuary and a shelter for homeless animals.
CThe officers, who took the dog to the Nuneaton Warwickshire Wildlife Sanctuary, had a shelter for homeless animals.
D The officers took the dog to the Nuneaton Warwickshire Wildlife Sanctuary, a shelter for homeless animals.

How should sentence 7 be changed?
A Change board to bored
B Change the comma to a semicolon
C Change sinked to sank
D Sentence 7 should not be changed.

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 18?
A Change that to it
B Change ridiculous to ridiculus
C Insert a comma after looked
D No change needs to be made.

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 4?
A Unfortunately, my hands aren’t interested, they don’t care what my brain is telling them to do.
B Unfortunately, my hands aren’t interested in what my brain is telling my hands to do.
C Unfortunately, my hands and my brain aren’t interested in what it is telling them to do.
D No revision is needed in this sentence.

What change needs to be made in sentence 4?
F Change variety to vareity
G Change that to they
H Change involved to involve
J No change needs to be made in sentence 4.

Joe did not maintain a consistent point of view in the first paragraph of this paper. What revision should he make in sentence 5 to correct this problem?
F Change she arrived to the dog arrived
G Change you to humans
H Change no one to they
J Change she would become to it would become

What change should be made in sentence 11?
A Change helped to helps
B Insert something after knew
C Change wasn’t a to wasn’t no
D Change permanant to permanent

What is the BEST revision to make in sentence 9?
A All I can hear is the whoosh of the wind, the thunder of the car’s metallic wheels, and the piercing shrieks of my fellow passengers.
B All I can hear is the whoosh of the wind and the thunder of the car’s metallic wheels, I can also hear my fellow passengers who have piercing shrieks.
C All I can hear is the whoosh of the wind and the thunder of the car’s metallic wheels and my fellow passengers and their piercing shrieks.
D All I can hear is the whoosh of the wind next to the thunder of the car’s metallic wheels beside my fellow passengers who have piercing shrieks.

What change should be made in sentence 6?
A Delete the comma
B Change there to their
C Change busyly to busily
D No change should be made.

Joe wants to provide a better closing for the second paragraph (sentences 6–10). Which of these could be added after sentence 10 to more effectively close this paragraph?
A People thought Jasmine was a very strange and unique dog.
B The staff was afraid that Jasmine might accidentally harm the puppies.
C She took care of them as if she had given birth to them herself.
D At that moment the workers at the shelter knew that Jasmine was special.

What is the correct way to write sentences 13 and 14?
F I was sure that I would look terrible in glasses and that all the kids would tease me.
G I was sure that I would look terrible in glasses all the kids would tease me.
H I was sure of one thing, I would look terrible in glasses, and all the kids would tease me.
J The sentences are written correctly in the paper.

How should sentence 31 be changed?
F Delete when
G Delete the comma after day
H Change surprise to suprise
J No change should be made.

Isaiah’s closing sentence is weak. Which of these sentences could replace sentence 20 and provide a more effective closing for this paper?
F I’m going to get right back in line and ride the Viper again!
G There’s no doubt in my mind as to what I will do now!
H Finally, I’m going to do it again.
J In closing, riding the Viper was an amazing experience.

How should sentence 24 be changed?
A Change are usually operating to is usually operating
B Delete the comma
C Change they to you
D Sentence 24 should not be changed.

Joe would like to add a sentence to support the idea he has presented in sentence 14. Which of these could BEST follow and support sentence 14?
F According to the staff, once Jasmine and the fawn met, they were inseparable.
G Clearly, the fawn was just a little baby at 11 weeks old.
H Jasmine preferred to take care of animals that were similar to her.
J Bunnies, badgers, guinea pigs, birds, and fawns—Jasmine cared for a strange mix of animals.

What change needs to be made in sentence 10?
F Change Mom to mom
G Change the comma to a period
H Change asked to ask
J No change needs to be made.

What change should be made in sentence 35?
F Change couldn’t to could’nt
G Delete hardly
H Change believe to beleive
J No change should be made in sentence 35.

Isaiah would like to add some detail to support the idea he has presented in sentence 14. Which sentence could BEST follow and provide support for sentence 14?
F I’m thinking that the ride will be over soon.
G It comes out of the tunnel really fast and heads straight up into the air.
H The light of a beautiful day is welcome but nearly blinding after the darkness of the tunnel.
J While I find adventure movies intriguing, this doesn’t feel intriguing at all.

What change needs to be made in sentence 25?
F Change you’re to your
G Insert a comma after diving
H Insert a comma after someday
J Change you may want to to and may want to

What is the BEST way to revise sentence 15?
A The animals at the sanctuary were comforted when Jasmine’s loving presence and gentle care comforted them.
B The animals at the sanctuary were comforted by Jasmine’s loving presence and gentle care.
C The animals at the sanctuary were comforted by Jasmine, who had her loving presence and her gentle care.
D The animals at the sanctuary were comforted by Jasmine, her loving presence, and her gentle care.

What is the correct way to write sentence 4?
F That’s what I thought getting glasses would be like. And was certain it would be the end of life as I knew it.
G That’s what I thought getting glasses would be like. I was certain it would be the end of life as I knew it.
H That’s what I thought getting glasses would be like. Because I was certain it would be the end of life as I knew it.
J The sentence is written correctly in the paper.

What change needs to be made in sentence 33?
A Change said to say
B Insert a period after glasses
C Change Wow to wow
D Insert quotation marks after the exclamation point

What is the BEST way to revise sentence 8?
F A shrill scream snaps me out of my daydream, and from the car behind me, it returns my focus to the world around me.
G A shrill scream snaps me out of my daydream and returns my focus to the world around me, it came from the car behind me.
H A shrill scream from the car behind me snaps me out of my daydream and returns my focus to the world around me.
J A shrill scream snaps me out of my daydream from the car behind me, returning my focus to the world around me.

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 21?
F Change communities to community’s
G Change requires to require
H Change maintenance to maintanence
J Make no change